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I've made some corrections to this version.

I've cropped out the part where the perspective becomes too stretched and I've cut the air conditioner to a better size.

I tilted the character a little bit to see if she looks better than way. I also changed her face and her ears.

I've added a little more hair to blend her with her surroundings.

Is it better?
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Critique by rozenlain Nov 28, 2012, 3:23:35 AM
I can see clearly the picture,. it looks better than the first and it could be better..
first the minor stuffs:
-the top right of the picture before the door you could try to minimize the width of it. it's hard to explain where it's below that bolt sign just to the right.
-door handle but I'm pretty sure you'll fix it when done.

minor stuffs aside,
-right hand of the character after the wrist still looks off.
-hips to legs (or to be direct the butt area) looks very thick.
-hair after the shoulders is too thick and a little stiff
-the cloth covering her chest which is being held by the door
I'm not really sure but I think it should be under the cloth after it.
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:iconbluepantsu:
I love situations like these, well done! :D
Looks great!
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:iconhaleyxh:
HaleyxH Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
looks really great! but what exactly has happened? :?
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:iconshia-neko-chan:
It's meant to make the viewer use their imagination.

It's for dreamers. :3
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HaleyxH Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
oh X3 okie thanks
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:iconloyreon12:
tails pose looks off for me :3
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:iconloyreon12:
looks alittle out of posstion and abit static but thats my opion :3 but good work :3
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galajo Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hmmm~ ...Her arms and hands still need some work; they're a little thin and don't have much volume to them~
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:iconshia-neko-chan:
oh right, her hands. I'll take a look at that.

Is there anything else about this picture you thing needs fixing? I'm thinking about starting the coloring phase soon, but I'm not sure if I should just yet.
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galajo Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
naw, it looks fine otherwise, though I'm just a little confused by what's hanging out at her right chest area, in general. >:
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